saki101

What a pleasure to find your comments on this. I have been thinking about them all, but particularly the matter of how to set off Sherlock's memory while he's sitting with John up in the alcove. I had considered italics, but thought that would be more confusing since I've been using them for direct thoughts. I could modify the previous sentence to "Sherlock let his head fall back against the books, closed his eyes and remembered..." and then start the next paragraph with an elipsis, without a capital letter, "...sometimes". Do you think that would signal the shift without being too obvious?

...the intimate memory is the stand-in for the sex (or cuddle?) they have once John falls unconscious.

Definitely a stand-in for sex as that would be the most efficient way for them both to be "refreshed" biologically. However, Sherlock is missing the mutuality of their past encounters. It isn't just John's body that he needs. I am happy you feel the substitution works because I considered a lot of different options for that scene.

Just tickled that you liked the "chemical defect" paragraph.

I stared at the water images in your links and considered them for quite a while. Perhaps it's a meandering river with occasional stream pools? (I really like both images.) I'm glad the speed changes didn't make you motion sick!

The confessions were so intense, I thought they needed to be spread out. I'm pleased you didn't think them too sparse or disjointed.

Many, many thanks for this!