http://saki101.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] saki101 2013-04-03 01:21 pm (UTC)

I changed the paragraph, used "John" instead of "he", but left the both->SH->John sequence. The image in the glass was the starting point for this section, but it was very tricky for me to make clear what thoughts it triggered. Hopefully, readers will find it clearer now. Thank you!

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