The changes you made are quite subtle--but you've definitely added intensity to the last scene. Napoleon's confusion and embarrassment and yearning come through in everything he does, as does his determination in the end not to lose what he's unexpectedly found.

I love the earlier interplay between them when they're going out on the double dates too, and the way his thoughts always come back to Illya--until he finally understands why.

Are you still up for January? I plan to get back to my routine tomorrow. And hope I haven't forgotten everything I did in November :)